Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Herb,

As others have said, this is your best post. A good write, start to finish. This one has some heart. And an very good melody - not "derivative". Whatever you latched onto for this one, keep that up...

Also, one of your best vocals. Honest, believable.

The piano was an excellent choice. A good balance between the piano and vocal in the mix. The guitar is at a good level, too.

I did not care for the tremolo (trills) of the mandolin during the guitar solo - so many of them. It made it sound like a Greek folk song... so a distraction, I think. The guitar solo is nice.

Your best. No question.

fj


I agree with you. Notice i have mixed it with different levels and the Mando in the Solo was making it too busy. In a songwriter meeting and song review the advice was to shorten the Solo to a 4 measure turnaround.... Anyway.... There's likely to be another edit.

Great advice my friend. Thanks

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