Originally Posted By: rayc
Hello Joanne,
you've a lovely interpretation of a lovely song.

Nice intro.
The vocal is generally very, very nice but there's something a little strident in it that needs EQ to soften it with a cut at about 3350 or so and make sure the reverb isn't exaggerating what ever freq you settle on as well.
The moment when the guitars go mono - at 0.24 focussing on the centre panned one for a moment - is odd and took all of my attention. It does reflection the very beginning of the intro but seems out of place at that point.
The 1st visit of cello could be a little quieter - just a bit mind.
The panned bvox are cool
The higher strings don't add much and are a little too aggressively bowed to add to the mood.
The bass notes move about a bit in the stereo image. It may be worth while grouping the acoustics and monoing the bass frequencies of them so that the bass sits low & centre. OR put a high pass on them to remove the bass tones and add a bass to the arrangement.
Lastly the right acoustic has a lot of plectrum click which is, generally, covered by the other instruments but stick out in the last chords.



Great tips Ray. I think I can apply some of that logic to rest of the tracks. The lead vocal definitely sounds "softer" now. Here is the next version

https://joannecooper.co.za/track/3031171/diary-version-5

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