There's a good song lurking in there Ian!
I agree with the comments above and I think the offer of synth sounds could help it no end. To me, the subject matter does imply some 'grit' as well: I'd have probably gone for a 'R. Stones'-type thing. Good luck with taking this one a step further!

NB: I'm not a fan of RealTracks as anyone who listens to my stuff will know. They're far too prescriptive for me. Starting off in MIDI keeps things flexible and I can make all the alterations I want to what I got originally from the style(s) I used. As long as you then use a quality hardware or software synth (and there are lots of the latter) which uses real samples and/or high-level synthesis you'll get great results.

John


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