Hi, Don.

Nicely done, but there are a few things you might want to have another look at.

The balance between the instruments and the vocals is way off - the backing instruments need to be brought up in volume.

There's also a lot of "punchiness" to the vocal - some of the vocals are really loud, and others are much more quiet. It would be nice if the vocals were more even. A compressor on the vocals will take care of a lot. Because you've got so many quiet and loud spots, you'll end up killing almost all the dynamic range, but I think you'll find it a lot nicer.

If you've Audacity, try loading your song in and setting the compressor to:

Threshold: -48db
Noise Floor: - 45db
Ratio: 8:1
Attack Time: 0.2 secs
Decay Time: 1.0 secs

[x] Make-up gain for 0db after compressing
[x] Compress based on Peaks

And you'll get a good idea what compression can do for you. You'll obviously get better results by applying the results onto to the vocals to level them out, and then mixing them with the backing tracks.

Finally, there are a few places where you drop some of "L" and "N" sounds, and you might want to re-take those. The phrase "All in all" is particularly problematic.

Thanks for posting - I hope some of this helps!

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?