I've skipped past the other reviews in order not to be influenced by what has already been said... so if I come up with reheated observations.. I apologize in advance!

First of all, these lyrics are very interesting for a variety of reasons. They are full of contradictory sentiments (my lover, my killer) and the theme is developed a bit mysteriously, so I found myself having to speculate about the meaning you were trying to communicate. Whether that was intentional, I don't know... but I do know that when you put the listener in a position to project meaning, they will almost always fill in the unknown variables with their own idealized thoughts. Since we typically like our own ideals, this technique pretty much guarantees that the listener will like what he/she "thinks" the song is saying.

Perhaps my FAVORITE thing about this song is the melody. In a blues type of song, I have almost stopped expecting to hear a real melody, mostly because there usually isn't one! This song not only has a melody, but it is an extremely unique and catchy one! I liked it immediately, especially the note you sing at the word STAY (with you) in the first verse, and repeated throughout. I'd go so far as to say that this song has such a distinctive melody that it has a signature quality.. which is one of the things music industry people look for when deciding whether or not a song is worth their time to promote.

another thing I really like is that walking bass line... it ties everything else together like glue! And the guitar was a very good choice also!

The video was technically very good.. I liked the way you transitioned from scene to scene, sometimes lingering long enough for the two scenes to have a unique feel because of the combination. For example, the scene in which the eyes fade into the spider web, and the fade pauses momentarily as if the eyes are watching the scene at the right. I'm guessing that was intentional.. either way, I thought it added impact.

The use of the spider metaphor could go either way depending on the audience. On one hand, it adds a strong emotional reaction that could really ramp up the response to the lyrics and generate those good goose bumps. On the other hand, it could have the effect of making a negative association to the song, depending on how strongly the listener dislikes spiders. To hedge your bets, it would probably be safer to lay the groundwork with the lyrics, then introduce the spider later in the song. By then the listener will be hooked on the song. Introducing a potentially negative element too early increases the likelihood that the listener will click away from the song, and you definitely don't want that. Introducing it later in the song increases the likelihood that the song will end at the same time as the adrenaline rush from the spider... which might be a positive.

You get one shot to hold the listener's attention for the whole song. Such considerations are tough to troubleshoot because every audience is different, so you have to make a creative decision and run with it. Fortunately, creativity is your strong suit, so no problems there!

Once again, I find myself really liking another of your collaborations! They tend to be VERY well executed by each of you, and the final product is always better than the sum of your separate contributions! Two enthusiastic thumbs up!


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