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Hi Ron!

Excellent intonation and tone production.

Can you try playing a little more loosely? Most of the melody notes are strictly on the beat, which gets old fast. Try attacking some of the notes a little behind or a little before the beat. Listen to Elvis do it and you will get the idea.

If you loosen up in the first two 4-bar lines, then tighten up on the 3rd 4, then loosen up again for the last 4, it will make a nice contrast. I hear the rhythm section coming in stronger on the 3rd line. A noticeable shift to strict rhythm there, for 4 bars will work nicely. Also use fewer glissandi on the third 4.

Also think about phrasing. When you glide from one note to another, the first is emphasized and the second is rendered less important. Part of the art of phrasing is the art of putting a clean attack on the most "important" notes and saving the slides for the other notes. This is of course a matter of taste and style. Your way of doing this is one of the things that will make your style unique. On this recording I cant avoid the impression that the choices of whether and when to slide or not slide are made randomly, without much consistency or planning. Am I wrong about that?

Phrasing comes with practice. It comes after you know the material well enough to play without thinking about notes, picks, pedals and levers. When it is your unique and beautiful voice coming through the strings you will know it, and you can tell armchair critics like me to take a flying leap.

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