Hi floyd,

What a great audio journey. The song and its arrangement are first class!

As I sat here listening with my eyes closed, the image that appeared in my mind was that of a guy sitting on a chair on a lonely stage. He looked a bit like Marlon Brando in 'Streetcar Named Desire' - roughly semi-dressed and wearing jeans and a white singlet; no shoes. The guy was half-talking, half-singing to the audience. (His partner had just stormed off into the wings leaving shattered chaos scattered across the floor in her wake.)

To my ears, this song has "from a theatrical production" written all over it. (I mean that as a compliment.)

As always, you've managed to invent some outstanding phrases that are not only conversational but also set the tone and clearly define the characters within the lyrics. Some of the word combinations that left me thinking, "ooooh, that's very clever, floyd" were...

  • front door screams (In my mind, this personified the front door. It's a terrific choice of verb.)
  • huffy last goodbye ('huffy' is a great choice of adjective - it adds a whole heap of indignant depth to the 'last goodbye')
  • exit cry (You cleverly made me think of 'war cry' with this phrase.)
  • I know the way her fever flows (A very creative way of saying 'she runs hot and cold'.)
  • The four lines from "You-don't-love-me accusations" (what a great compound adjective, by the way!) through to ..."the fault".
  • "Give your enemy an apology, Give your lover another day" (such very powerful lines that astutely summarise the duality of the couple's relationship)

I totally enjoyed everything about this.

Regards,
Noel

P.S. I forgot to mention how crystal clear your production is. It's outstanding.



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