Originally Posted By: Mr_Songman


HearToLearn?

I feel I must come to the defence of Janice and Bud over your somewhat harsh and misguided criticisms of their wonderful song.

As I'm sure you can appreciate, neither punctuation or capitalisation are an inherent part of lyric writing. Your mention of paragraphs and indents is equally perplexing.

If I may say, it shows a distinct lack of understanding of the vitally important differences between reading and speaking, speaking and singing and, more importantly, writing and songwriting.

In songwriting, phrasing and emphasis are an essential part of a songs lyric.

I would offer as an example the fact that Adele actually won an Oscar for rhyming 'skyfall' with 'crumble'. Two words which patently do not rhyme on the page. This was circumvented by her extending the second syllable in 'crumble' and singing it as 'crumball'. Messy but effective.

Another example would be Rihanna's change of emphasis to the word 'murderer' in her song Unfaithful. By extending and emphasising the last syllable of the word it helped to carry the line through the melody perfectly.

This method was highlighted by the vastly knowledgeable and experienced Mr_Songman in his review of Janice and Bud's song.

The correct phrasing and emphasis of a lyric is the difference between making a line seamless or cumbersome.

And this is in no way associated with vernacular, dialect, syntax or grammar, all of which are in a continuous flux - tautology there - but of absolutely no consequence or import.

I hope this helps in some small way. smile


Mr_Songman, all of my comments were actually completely guided. If I may say, your response shows a distinct lack of understanding of the vitally important concept of humor. smile

Now, in YOUR defense, you do not know me in the least to know my sense of humor. You would also, probably, be unaware of the relationship I have with the people involved in the project. Furthermore, this is the internet. It can be VERY difficult to know a person's intent from a response like mine. I would not expect you to have seen, or necessarily remember, my previous response with praise for the project. You may have also missed the response under mine from two of the three people involved in the project. It would have given a point of reference to my aforementioned praise and humor posts. All I ask is that you DO see my next point...

I so appreciate your willingness to address what you perceived as, for lack of a better term, a "troll" on the forum. THEN to go the extra step of explaining for someone's educational benefit the concepts involved is impressive. It's nice to know someone like you is willing to step out like you did. Especially, since it would have involved people I've come to know and respect greatly. Sincerely, thank you for that! It's much needed in today's world.

I hope that helps in some small way as well. All my best to you. smile

Now if we can turn our attention back on where it needs to be. This well crafted song. smile

Last edited by HearToLearn; 12/12/19 02:24 AM.
Chad (Hope that makes it easier)

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