The backing tracks are fine. It's crunchy and I like hearing some more power oriented songs here.

The problem, as I see it, are the lyrics and delivery. A song about urban devastation is fine. But not using words like "bummer" to describe living in the "PRO-jects".

It's the hood. and it is not a "bummer". A "bummer" is when your friend bogarts your joint. The lyrics need to match the wrath of the tracks. They need to sound like you really live there. This sounds like you visited the hood one day to write about it.

Rap is the music of the street because it captures the flavor and the attitude of the inner city lifestyle. It is performed by people who live it.

Your desire to do a socially conscious lyric is commendable, but it needs more realism to capture the devastation. Don't be an observer...
be a participant.

Please take this critique in good spirits. It is, only one person's immediate reaction to a new song.

I commend you both for doing something original and posting it here. We need more guys like you!

Moo

If it has four legs and moos...it MIGHT be Mr Moohead.