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This is a keeper.

Great backing tracks, outstanding vocals and a perfect mix.


My sentiments exactly! The production is stunningly brilliant. I'm in a state of awe right now.

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The lyrics need to match the wrath of the tracks. They need to sound like you really live there. This sounds like you visited the hood one day to write about it.

Some lyrics perfectly match the mood and emotion of the music but others do not. When I listened to the song, I didn't feel a strong sense of involvement with the words, In contrast, I was totally spellbound by the music and production. My suggestion would be to look at ways to show stronger development in the lyrics. (There seems to be a lot of "telling" in the lyrics rather than "showing and telling". There's an article HERE called Rusty's Collar that explains what I mean by that statement.)

Please keep in mind that this is just my opinion. This song has potential to really fly because there is so much about it that is incredible.

Moohead: In Australia, "bummer" has a different interpretation and it makes sense to me.

I'm still in awe
Noel

Last edited by Noel96; 01/25/10 10:50 PM.
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