Floyd and Greg,
You definitely hit the mark in your aim. Real strong Waylon and Willie feel to this. If I had one suggestion lyrically it would be in that first line of the second verse: I’d consider subbing out “a month” for a “years” or “a year”. To me, month doesn’t seem quite a long enough absence to deserve mention. Use or lose, as they say.
Nice offering, fellas. Good luck with the pitch!
Best regards,
Deej
Deej,
I appreciate the suggestion. However...
A "month of Sundays" is a common expression.
Google it.
It is actually defined in the dictionary.
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/month-of-sundays--aOver half a year. Not worth mentioning?
You can google "a year of Sundays", too - and while you will find some hits, you should discover that it is not the common expression that "a month of Sundays" is.
As regards to songwriting...
Using a common expression such as "a month of Sundays" quickly puts an image into the listener's mind of "passage of time" - as opposed to saying "it's been a long time".
It also has the advantage of "singing well". It "falls on the ear" well, making it a good song-writing phrase.
"A year of Sundays" causes a "bump" to the ear - since it is not the common expression expected. Your listener's mind will head off on a tangent while you continue singing about some new development (hopefully - not rehashing something you have already established).
And this does not sing as well as the original expression.
All important considerations when writing.