I think this is a real gem. It sounds like a tune from one of the great musicals of the 40s, 50s and 60s that Rodgers and Hammerstein, or Lerner and Loewe wrote. I've always wanted to write a song like that and have tried but not been successful at it. There are one or two lines where the prosody could be better but I'm comparing it to the great masters and that is perhaps unfair to do ("tougher and can do more" feels slightly cramped, for instance). In fairness, my songs always have a few instances like that.

I saw recently where you say you liked Tin Pan Alley songs but didn't think you had the voice for it. I think you should give it a try anyway. You have a great voice and it just may work in that genre.

Again, this tune's a real winner!


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