Hey man, cool song!

As others have said, it captures the bleakness of the subject matter really well.

I have a musical suggestion for this and other songs that you may write in the future, since in many ways a lot of your songs, I think, are poems that are set to music.

I lived in Manhattan for a really long time and sometimes walking in these concrete canyons, especially at night and if you're all alone, there is something conjured up in the wind in those canyon walls that is very somber, and minor sounding, when you think about everything that's going down. In fact, in that city there is a constant ongoing clash between the major and the minor and you'll hear it on every Springsteen album from the early era.

I noticed this song is in D, G, A.

Compositionally you may think of adding some strings or something with other tones that may be more in a minor mode and you don't even need to change the main chords at all in order to do this.

By providing just a keyboard pad or maybe even some strings that would have a minor riff against those chords you may increase the depth of the composition in a Springsteen kind of a way.

It's just a suggestion, and what I was hearing and feeling as I listened to it.

But take that for whatever it's worth, if it's useful or not, I don't know. I like the song man. I like all of your stuff.

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