Nice work... This sounds like a crooner song kinda like Sinatra might do. Some horns would have topped that off nicely.

So... the second verse had a guitar noodling in the background that was distracting. Then in the break where I would have expected some tasty noodling stuff.... nothing... a few changes might be in order.

Some of the word pronunciations are a bit oddly done for native English speakers... I don't know if English is your native language or not. (my apologies on that) One of the things that bugs me with the SV voices is that they often have perfect diction in how they pronounce words. One example towards the end, is "better", where the "t"s are prominent. That might be OK in operatic music, but in modern music, not so much. In everyday English we don't often pronounce those "t"s. It's more like "bedder" with a very slight hint of the "t" in that word. Same thing for several other words earlier in the song. I often take a fair amount of time just working on the way the synth sings a certain word. Two syllable words, actually two or more syllables, can really be frustrating to get right and natural sounding at times. Surprisingly, it can literally be just the slightest starting point of a syllable or the duration of a note segment that means the difference between "that sounds weird" or "perfect".

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