Originally Posted by Chris37
Thanks for your comments, B.D.Thomas and DC Ron.
I'd like to know if the problem with my lyrics is about the pronunciation or about the meaning...

Chris, for me it's the meaning of the lyrics. Believe it's expressing a metaphysical mindset, but some of the couplets lose me, starting with the first one.

But I also think that lyrical ambiguity can be a good thing as it allows for broad relatability. So I would not be surprised if others identify with your lyrics immediately, and feel differently than I do. Then maybe it's not your lyrics at all, it's me.

I enjoyed your tune very much either way.


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