Hi, James.

It's an interesting experiment, but there are... issues.

It's hard to get past the phrase "sluttish times". I assume Shakespeare meant the less common terms ("not cleaned"), but... laugh

Setting a sonnet to an electric guitar heavy arrangement feels out of place, especially since the language remains archaic. The words (0:33, "monuments") feel forced in places. Phrases like "And broils root out the work of masonry" are hard enough to understand. The term "broils" here refers to battle, not the more common meaning "heat". But the setting and emphasis doesn't help bring that understanding across.

So it seems you've taken on an almost impossible task here. But I feel that the arrangement and setting works against the meaning of the sonnet.

Sorry to sound negative, so as Shakespeare didn't say, ""It's better to have set a sonnet to music than never to have set a sonnet to music at all." wink

(Yes, I'm misquoting Tennyson, not Shakespeare)

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?