Originally Posted by Tano Music
So much to like in this Noel...I especially liked the last line the the chorus--it has kind of an extension of syllables and notes that really catches your attention! The lyric is lovely, and the band is well-chosen. Did I hear a tubular bell there near the end--kind of like the presence of the Almighty? And the nice slow-down with the final notes. The vocaloids are really great--you did a nice job with them, especially the duet/harmony parts.

I have only one "suggestion"...I didn't like the word "quirky". I think it's very descriptive, but I have found words like this a bit of a clunker in an otherwise very smooth-to-sing song (I think it's the hard "R" followed by the hard "K"). If it were my project, I'd replace it with something like "silly" or "peculiar" or even "odd little". Just my thoughts.

Great work!
Hi Tom.

Thanks for dropping in. And thanks for having a listen and commenting.

I appreciate that you noticed the last line in the chorus 🤩 As with many of my songs, draft lyrics were in progress well before I started putting the words to music. Originally, I planned to end the chorus with 'clouds' as it rhymed with 'loud' in the previous line. This worked. When the music came along, though, I had 'do' in the last line on a held note and it felt like a rhyme for 'do' had good musical value. In the end, I tried rhyming both 'loud' and 'do' and liked the effect it created so I stayed with it. As I'm thinking about it now, I'm wondering if this is another aspect of the musical asymmetry that David (@dcuny) is referring to.

Also, thank you for your comment about 'quirky'. It's a really good point and one that I did not think of. One of the big differences between the American and Australian accents is in how the 'R' sound is used. In Australia, our R sound is a lot less pronounced. In 'quirky', the 'ir' becomes the vowel sound "er" (phonetically ɜ). With the American R, it tends to be an 'uh' sound followed by an R sound (phonetically ˈər') In other words, Australian English has no separate R sound attached to a vowel. If this song ends up in the hands of a non-Australian or non-British person, I can see how "quirky" is an uncomfortable word. I'll change it to something a little friendlier smile

Thanks again!
--Noel

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