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#610442 - 08/12/20 04:30 PM
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She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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She Doesn't Want Me to Dance I had this song about 80% finished, was working on the chorus, and needed a hook. I'm a big joker at home and often partake in mock Jerry Lewis rhythmic ambulations about the house. After engaging in these shenanigans, I'll say to my wife, "Let's go out dancing tonight." She always deadpans, "No." Thie last time she said that, I realized I had my hook. Tracks: RT2929 Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm PopFunkyJoe RT2933 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking SongwriterFolkSlap RT697 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm ElecRockDirty RT650 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopRockBritHeavy RT1722 Guitar, Electric, Soloist TexasBluesRockStraight RT1008 Bass, Electric, ElecRock Ev The drum track is spliced together from various loops. Lyrics She’s the rain on the meadow She’s the light behind each shadow When the night comes crawling And she keeps me awake Into my heart she’s falling She says we’ll take a morning break She’s something else She puts me in a trance She says she loves me But she doesn’t want me to dance She’s the moon in my passion She’s the fabric of all fashion When the night comes crawling And she keeps me awake Into my heart she’s falling She says we’ll take a morning break She’s something else She puts me in a trance She says she loves me She doesn’t want me to dance
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#610455 - 08/12/20 05:29 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Registered: 04/02/19
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Loc: Canberra, Australia
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Hi Scott
I'll leave the analysis to the experts, but I really like this one.
After my first listen I immediately cued it up again.
Regards,
Leon
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#610500 - 08/13/20 02:50 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
[Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Registered: 11/30/07
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Good song! Love your vocal.
"She says she loves me
But she doesn’t want me to dance"
Nice hook!
Track sounds good also, enjoyed the listen.
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#610514 - 08/13/20 04:55 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
[Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Registered: 12/29/10
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Loc: Charlotte, NC
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Crawlin’...fallin’...loves how you “wobbled” those in the melody.
Really interesting selection of guitar RTs..gave it great texture.
Liked the stops you used.
Vocals++
Your wife has got to share the royalties on this one!
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#610568 - 08/13/20 11:21 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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The spoken tag was worth the price of admission  We could envision the Lewis ambulations. The band is a cool RT genre mashup and well backed your rousing well delivered vocal. (Janice provided "rousing!") Nice use of the drum loops also. Fun! J&B
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#610605 - 08/13/20 04:13 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Hi Scott
I'll leave the analysis to the experts, but I really like this one.
After my first listen I immediately cued it up again.
Regards,
Leon Thanks, Leon. I'm not good at analysis either, just listening. Good song! Love your vocal.
"She says she loves me
But she doesn’t want me to dance"
Nice hook!
Track sounds good also, enjoyed the listen. I appreciate the comments, Dave. Crawlin’...fallin’...loves how you “wobbled” those in the melody.
Really interesting selection of guitar RTs..gave it great texture.
Liked the stops you used.
Vocals++
Your wife has got to share the royalties on this one! Royalties, huh? I can only wish for those. The spoken tag was worth the price of admission We could envision the Lewis ambulations. The band is a cool RT genre mashup and well backed your rousing well delivered vocal. (Janice provided "rousing!") Nice use of the drum loops also. Fun! J&B Thanks, J&B. I had a lot of fun making this one and ad libbing at the end.
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#610607 - 08/13/20 04:22 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Registered: 12/27/03
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This is really good. I liked how the guitar leads augments your excellent vocal, nice work there. I loved your lyrics. Super use of RTs. Super stops also. Love those drums.
Excellent work.
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#610632 - 08/13/20 07:44 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Ezekiel's Storm,
I hope your wife still likes you... On a bright side, this secret solo dance is great!
Clever lyrics! Very well put together. A lot of spontaneous details, but makes a whole. Vocals are A+. Thank you for sharing!
Misha.
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#610634 - 08/13/20 07:59 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
[Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Registered: 10/02/19
Posts: 294
Loc: Aberdeen, NC
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Hi Scott,
This is a cool arrangement. I really liked you vocals. They hearkened back to the 80's, kind of a Simple Minds sort of vibe. As a matter of fact, if you posted on here, "Hey, listen to this old Simple Minds song." I would have believed you!
Thanks for posting it, I enjoyed listening to it.
Also, at least you're able to dance like Jerry Lewis, who had SOME rhythm, I'm not even at that level... Ha!
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#610643 - 08/14/20 02:43 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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It's a cool, amusing well constructed song. the vocal and melody are ace but the way the vocals is split L & R with no presence in the centre of the image weirded me out a bit.
In my head phones the vocal is mainly in the left channel with some image in the other...sounds a bit like the imbalance that many, many ADT plug ins cause.
Nevertheles --- cool
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#610654 - 08/14/20 05:45 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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You know, I thought I was listening to the Doors. You have an uncanny resemblance to Van Morrison. I love it!!
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#610683 - 08/14/20 10:48 AM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Very cool backtrack. Super vocal. Love the tone in your voice. Well done. Guitar was excellent as well
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#610699 - 08/14/20 01:52 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Very Haight-Ashbury to me, liked how the lead guitar didn't step on the vocal. And your singing was terrific as usual. Great trip back in time for me.
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#610722 - 08/14/20 04:26 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Really nice production and a great vocal. Nice use of guitar solo realtracks.
Very impressive.
Peter
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#610746 - 08/14/20 07:41 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Cool song. The vocals are very rich. They remind me of mix between Neil Diamond and David Bowie. Great use of the band.
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#610842 - 08/15/20 04:26 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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This is really good. I liked how the guitar leads augments your excellent vocal, nice work there. I loved your lyrics. Super use of RTs. Super stops also. Love those drums.
Excellent work. Thanks, Mario. I've been meaning to tell you that I love your tag/signature line on your posts. Ezekiel's Storm,
I hope your wife still likes you... On a bright side, this secret solo dance is great!
Clever lyrics! Very well put together. A lot of spontaneous details, but makes a whole. Vocals are A+. Thank you for sharing!
Misha.
My wife had a good laugh when I played her this song. Thanks, Misha. Hi Scott,
This is a cool arrangement. I really liked you vocals. They hearkened back to the 80's, kind of a Simple Minds sort of vibe. As a matter of fact, if you posted on here, "Hey, listen to this old Simple Minds song." I would have believed you!
Thanks for posting it, I enjoyed listening to it.
Also, at least you're able to dance like Jerry Lewis, who had SOME rhythm, I'm not even at that level... Ha! Keep dancing, Bawb! If Elaine Bennis can do it, so can you! It's a cool, amusing well constructed song. the vocal and melody are ace but the way the vocals is split L & R with no presence in the centre of the image weirded me out a bit.
In my head phones the vocal is mainly in the left channel with some image in the other...sounds a bit like the imbalance that many, many ADT plug ins cause.
Nevertheles --- cool Thanks, Ray. I used Waves Reel ADT, but used the stereo plug-in instead of the mono.
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#610843 - 08/15/20 04:28 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Very cool backtrack. Super vocal. Love the tone in your voice. Well done. Guitar was excellent as well
Scott, thanks for the compliment! Very Haight-Ashbury to me, liked how the lead guitar didn't step on the vocal. And your singing was terrific as usual. Great trip back in time for me. Tunemonger, thanks so much for the comment and the listen. Really nice production and a great vocal. Nice use of guitar solo realtracks.
Very impressive.
Peter
Thanks, Peter!!! Cool song. The vocals are very rich. They remind me of mix between Neil Diamond and David Bowie. Great use of the band. JPT, I appreciate the comments.
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#610850 - 08/15/20 05:00 PM
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Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Now that is a very cool song and a fun listen... You have a great voice - mix and tracks were perfect.
Excellent and much enjoyed!
Bob
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#610913 - 08/16/20 08:25 AM
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I always like hearing about the story behind the song.
I'm not crazy about some of the earlier guitar fills, but that section starting around 3:14 is sweet!
I get a David Bowie vibe from this. Good mix and vocals. Enjoyed it.
Scott
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#610954 - 08/16/20 02:08 PM
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Fun song!! Love the enthusiasm and energy! Really well arranged and produced......the lead guitar fits nicely with the tension in the lyric! Well done!!! Take care. Greg
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