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One more cigarette Hi all. I wrote this song 6 years ago. So it's time to dust it off and give it a new coat of paint. All comments welcome. Sitting in my hospital bed doctors had to take one Leg. Lungs too weak to whistle up the blues. The nurse is filling out my chart she's concerned about my ailing heart. Just one more cigarette before I die. Emphysemas getting me down my chest keeps making a gurgling sound. Tell me I could drop dead any time. My situation ain't no joke but I'm just dying for a smoke. Just one more cigarette before I die. Chorus Well I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Dropping half-burnt Stogies in the park. Yes I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Just one more cigarette before I die. Bridge Chorus Well I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Dropping half-burnt Stogies in the park. Yes I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Just one more cigarette before I die. That nicotine is what I need lack of it sure makes me mean. An arm or leg I'd give to ease my pain. So don't bring flowers don't bring sweets a puff or two will suit my needs. Just one more cigarette before I die. Well I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Dropping half-burnt Stogies in the park. Yes I've been blowing smoke rings in the dark. Just one more cigarette before I die. Yes one more cigarette before I die. Please give me one more cigarette before I die. ****** Song Summary ************* Title: One more cigarette File:One More Cigarette.SGU Key=C , Tempo 190, Length (m:s)=2:40 4 bar intro, 120 bar chorus, from bar 5 to bar 124. Repeat x1 chorus No Melody Soloist track has 654 notes, Soloist harmony is < no harmony >(0) Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0, Style is _MEMPHSW.STY (MemphisSwing w/ Piano) RealTracks in style: ~541:Bass, Electric, Pop Sw 190 RealTracks in style: 1551:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm MemphisSwing Sw 190 RealTracks in style: 944:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm MemphisCleanA-B Sw 190 RealTracks in style: 947:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm MemphisDirtyA-B Sw 190 RealTracks in song: 1869:Guitar, Resonator, Soloist WesternSwingRob Sw 165 (Bluesy) RealDrums [in style:NashvilleShuffle^01-a:Sidestick, HiHat , b:Snare, Ride *******************
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What a hoot! My first thought was WTH? Then, it struck me as ironically funny.... yep.... I'd say a comical sort of song. Looking at the lemonade side of the thing.
Good job.
Now.... a story. We used to play a club in a town and had a regular following. Among the ones who were there all the time was this one old fellow. He had a serious tobacco habit. In fact, he had throat cancer and they had to put in one of those tracheotomy holes in his throat so he could breathe. He used a voice box that he pressed against his neck to speak. In spite of all that, and the damage done by cigarettes, he still continued to smoke. He'd put the cigarette in the tracheotomy hole and let it hang there. It was a perfect fit. I reckon he figured why not? No one lives for ever.
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Catchy tune!
Hope it's not a true story.
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Hi Rob4580,
I appreciated your well-paced composition with a pleasant arrangement. I have been a smoker since my youth and I understood your well written words because you are addicted to nicotine and changing your habits is not really easy. People die every day from the harmful effects of tobacco. And we smokers, we know the risks and the price to pay of this addiction..
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Derochette
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The new paint suits it!
Good arrangement, lyrics are - as Derochette noted - spot on.
The instruments occasionally get in the way of the vocals. Not a big deal - isn't that the ongoing challenge of mixing?
I enjoyed listening!
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Love the humour you bring to your songs, Rob - which in this case not only raises a chuckle, but shines a light on the tragic consequences of nicotine addiction.
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Good tune! That really caught me by surprise. And, as a former smoker who still loves them, I get it completely!
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Hey Rob ...
It's always a treat to see a new one from you on the forum. And ... the irony of humor and sad truth. Neither Di nor I have ever been smokers. But we both come from a family of heavy smokers. There's a lot of truth in your song ... along with the well-place, poignant humor.
I've played way too many honky tonks and clubs over the years ... the second hand smoke was so thick at times you had to push it out of the way just to walk across the floor.
As always, enjoyed this a lot. Nicely done! wishing you the very best ...
Alan
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I really like the humour in the lyrics, good arrangement and vocal too.
Very well done, enjoyed!
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Cool lyric Rob. Hilarious. Excellent vocal. Loved the backtrack. Well done.
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Argh ... I don't know whether to laugh heartily or clobber that fictitious smoker of the song a good one, haha. Seriously, though, a really great song with a good ol' dollop of dark irony in it. Loved it ... from a distance from the smoke ;-))) Bravo.
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Quite a nice toe tapper. Enjoyed my listen.
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Hi Rob.
If JC was still alive he'd be on this one.
Tragically funny.
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Haha. Great lyrics and a catchy tune. I gotta send this to a couple friends trying to quit. Really a lot of fun, Rob.
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They say smoking is more addictive than heroin. As an ex smoker I found it very hard to kick the habbit. Thanks for you comment GH What a hoot! My first thought was WTH? Then, it struck me as ironically funny.... yep.... I'd say a comical sort of song. Looking at the lemonade side of the thing.
Good job.
Now.... a story. We used to play a club in a town and had a regular following. Among the ones who were there all the time was this one old fellow. He had a serious tobacco habit. In fact, he had throat cancer and they had to put in one of those tracheotomy holes in his throat so he could breathe. He used a voice box that he pressed against his neck to speak. In spite of all that, and the damage done by cigarettes, he still continued to smoke. He'd put the cigarette in the tracheotomy hole and let it hang there. It was a perfect fit. I reckon he figured why not? No one lives for ever.
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That last line, "Please give me one more cigarette before I die," made me laugh out loud because as any cigarette smoker past or present would know, those little paper tubes stuffed with tobacco sure can reduce a body to begging for one  !!! That 'Memphis Swing' style's got enough joyful rhythm and 'lectric gee-tar strumming to keep a listener slappin' their thighs or tapping their toes long after the song has ended. Only thing that didn't seem quite right was the quality of your singing voice -- you sure don't sound like a heavy smoker! 'Course, you don't have to be smoker to sing about smoking, now, do you???
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Hello Captain. Not a true story but close. Thank you for your comment. Rob4580 Catchy tune!
Hope it's not a true story.
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Hello Derochette. Thanks for the great comment. Back in the day smoking was said to be healthy. I am an ex smoker so I understand all the bad health effects that come with it. Rob4580 Hi Rob4580,
I appreciated your well-paced composition with a pleasant arrangement. I have been a smoker since my youth and I understood your well written words because you are addicted to nicotine and changing your habits is not really easy. People die every day from the harmful effects of tobacco. And we smokers, we know the risks and the price to pay of this addiction..
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A hoot indeed! Well written and a nice toe-tapper!
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Date: 16/03/2021
System: good PC speakers (with sub)
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Song One more cigarette
Overall impression
Humour in song is harder than it sounds, many try and fail.
Here it is maintained throughout.
Overall a fun song and an enjoyable listen
Mix / Production
At times sounds a bit cluttered to me – could there be one gtr too many?
Instrumentation
Nice clean rocky gtrs -
I actually like all the sounds except for the lead gtr (solo)
Vocals
Lead vox is nicely sung and in its place in the mix – did you consider adding a harm track – at least in the B section ‘blowing smoke rings in the dark’?
What I really liked
Contrast between the 2 sections which maintains the energy
Contrast between the bouncy upbeat sounding track and the sombre subject matter
What could be improved
I’m not that keen on half rhymes (sweets-needs etc) but I think that’s just me, and – in terms of the rhyme pattern- find the end of the chorus section a little odd (dark/die)
Not really sure where the gtr solo is going.
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