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Hi All,
Josie and I wanted to share our latest song. This is all BIAB/RT's and was mixed using Garageband '11. Thanks for listening - we hope you enjoy it!
Bob
*** Making adjustments to the mix - the song will be reposted soon ***
Copyright © 2011 Josie Beck, Robert Dean
"Broken Lines"
Another morning rising
The world is at my door
And the shadows climb the walls
Then fall slowly to the floor
Storm clouds are forming
The letters of your name
And they cover me completely
Like a quilt of summer rain
Chorus:
Now you have gone
Away from here
You are flying free
You have disappeared
And you left behind
A trail that's hard to find
A path of broken lines
That I'll connect - with time
Another silent midnight
The moon is hung so high
And the stars are staring back at me
Fading in and out of sight
I hear a nightbird flying
And I feel her passing glance
Let the sky draw its curtains
On this blue starlight dance
Chorus: repeat
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Great lyrics! Really nice song. Either Robert's vocal needs to be as dry as Josie's or Josie needs to have the same verb applied to her vocal. Those vocals need to be put in the same space because it sounds odd otherwise. I suggest both have verb and maybe a touch less. Outside of that, really great song and great writing!
Dan
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Agree with Dan
As presented here, the two vox do not mix and I’m not sure Bob’s voice is well suited to this song.
Also when you get the fx issue sorted out on Bob’s vox, you might like to think about arranging the two vox lines in harmony rather than in unison.
Shame as I think what we have is a simple but catchy song
Marc
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Dan,
Thanks - appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment. I understand what your saying regarding the verb and space for the vocals. Will make those adjustments.
Thanks again,
Bob
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Marc,
Thanks for listening and the feedback. We'll be making some adjustments to the song to get a better blend, etc.
Bob
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Thanks again Dan and Marc for your initial thoughts and comments. Here's our reworked version...  http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10566912Bob
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Wonderful rework. Really- that is so much better. The thing about it is this- yes it sounds better, but because the mix is more thoughtful, the SONG really comes through now. Now I understand the lyrics. Because mixing is kind of like cooking, where you can choose your ingrediants and mix them together any number of ways, it's always a good idea to keep in mind the finished dish. Will all the ingrediants you've mixed throughout make the finished dish the best it can be? Will the spices enhance the dish, or distract from it? More towards music- will the effects enhance the message, or distract from it? Will the balance of both vocalists compliment one another in such a way that the message still comes through? Will the arrangement get in the way of things, or will it breath and allow the message to come through without getting in the way? When there is much thought put into such things, this new mix happens- and it works wonderfully well. Everything comes together to present this song in a very poigniant way. The song- always service the song. That will almost always dictate what should and shouldn't happen within the mix and arragement.
That's an awful long way of saying this is right on guys. This is probably your best sounding work yet, and certainly a great tune as well.
A+ !
Dan
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Joise for goodness sake- clear out your PM's! LOL! Haven't been able to send you one in a while!
Dan
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Hi Bob and Josie,
I thoroughly enjoyed the reflective, calm feel of these lyrics and music. Listening to them was a pleasure. I admire the way that the fiddle was woven in and out of the mix. It enhanced the arrangement no end. I've got to say that both of you sing and harmonize incredibly well together.
Wonderful work.
All the best,
Noel
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Thank you Dan. I really appreciate you listening again. Your opinion and advice has always helped and means a lot to me. Noel, Thank you for listening and your always thoughtful and insightful critiques. This time around we were going for an Austin City Limits unplugged feel. RT's are acoustic and fingerpicking (Roller) and the George and Allis bg fiddles. Tracks were editted in RB then mixed in Tracktion. Harmonies are me and the family - TCH Voicetone. I know Bob will be happy to see the better reviews too. OK, I have cleaned out my PM's. 
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Dan/Noel,
Thanks for your kind words. We worked hard on this one to get the feel right. All the "studio" credit for the mix goes to Josie - she has the touch...
Bob
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Hi Josie & Bob, Really very good mix this time. Wonderful lyric writing. Harmonies very good. You should both be proud. I know how hard it is to get that right mix for a song, I struggle each and every time. It seems what worked in one song doesn't work in another even with the same singer, go figger  My thought on that is, every song has it's own life. Kudos to you both. Best regards George
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Cool. Well done Bob and Josie on a nice song beautifully produced.
John
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George,
Thanks for listening and commenting. Yes, I totally agree with you. I am always fascinated and surprised by the way songs evolve over time - even a short period of time.
John,
Thank you for listening and for your kind thoughts. Very appreciated.
Bob
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Bob & Josie, Great song! You two do make a great team. I was disappointed when I first visited this post, and you had removed the song (I was looking forward to hearing it). Glad you fixed whatever needed fixing, and reposted it. Really enjoyed it! Keep up the good work! Steve
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Pretty song. Nice work as usual. Thanks for sharing! My Music Reverbnation My Music MyspaceRead My Blog
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Steve, Thanks for coming back and listening Your thoughts and kind words are very appreciated. Robert, Thanks for listening and for your nice words. Bob
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Well done for the rework you two. This is a huge improvement which allows the simple melody and evocative lyric to come through far better.
I find Bob's vox more confident on this take too.
Well done!
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Marc, Thanks for taking a listen to the new version. We appreciate it! Bob
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Great song and mix. Both of you sound good together. Next "Dolly and Kenny" who knows Vocals standing out loud and clear, something nice and relaxing to listen to. thanks for putting this up. musiclover
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