Hi folks, I've been a musical theatre writer (bookwriter/lyricist) for 26 years, and I always secretly wanted to write music, but always felt too challenged. I made some progress in recent years with Ableton Live...now enter Band in a Box. I'm starting to find a workflow, so far so good. (BIAB, Audacity for vocals, Melodyne to fix vocals and change guitar lines etc.)

Any comments about this track welcome. I know it has glitches,it's not meant as a demo, it's just me singing, it's just a first draft writing attempt. There will be many changes and refinements, so any critical comments welcome. There is a setup to the song at the link.

One thing I know is that I want it to build up so that the peak is at the soldiers singing. (now it's before, then peters out) I kind of gave up, I'm no arranger, I need help getting it to build.

http://snd.sc/eCD2u1

Any comments welcome!
Vincent