Well, I wasn’t grabbed by that opening sequence of chord changes.
But thereafter, this one was a bit of a treat.

I raelly like the tone of the vox and the judiciously chosen backing instruments, which provide just the right level of depth.

That’s one seriously catchy chorus, just the way I like them!

Also, very well done for setting quite a bleak lyric to an upbeat musical setting. The overall effect is one of hope which I guess was the effect you were looking for.

There are one or two points which perhaps could be improved.

Starting with the lyric…

I found some of the lyrics a little awkward with repetitions that added little artistically the ‘loved ones’, all those ‘seems’ and, in particular I found the ‘miss them’ / ‘wish for them’ lines rather clunky.

Also, this could be me, but I find the 2nd verse problematical. Specifically, I don’t see where the sacrifice comes in.

Musically I feel the lead gtr part could use a little work. It’s as if its always searching for a strong hook that fits, particularly after the key change.

Also for me, the ‘quietened down’ ending section is not a huge success.

But overall I really enjoyed this one and will definitely get round to listening to some more of your stuff.


Regards,

Marc

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