I liked this Steve. A high grade pop song with performances to match.

In particular, you have a clever and consistent lyric and a good tune.

I have just one or two reservations, if you ever plan to do a rework…

I wonder about the piano intro which sounds a bit like it is from a different track

hmm the link at 1:33 doesn’t work for me (here I concur with Paul above - it's just a little cheesy!)

Would there be a way of lightening up the mix just a little at 2:25 for the little gtr solo. Here I find it is having a job to cut through. Maybe bring down the org here?

While the structure is good, I wonder if you could get away with having 1 fewer reps of the chorus at the end. Not sure that the last one adds much.

All the best,

Marc