Hi Rob,

Nice song. Has a sweet almost melancholy feel to the melody that I like a lot.

I would like to very humbly suggest a couple of things that I feel would make the song flow better , which of course you are entirely free to ignore completely!

I feel the intro could be cut to four bars so that the vocal comes in around 20 seconds or so. 36 seconds is a fairly long wait to get to the song when you consider most songs will be hitting the chorus at about a minute or so.

And on the subject of the chorus, which of course is the hook, I think the second chorus repeat needs to come in sooner. All that is needed is to put the Lead Break between Chorus 2 and 3 rather than before the first repeat!

But, as always, just my humble opinion.

Good luck with the song

Take care

Martin


Music is what feelings sound like.