Crikey, there's a lot in there Rob!
It sounds very personal so I'm a bit wary of doing any critique on the lyrics. But I wasn't quite drawn in to the tale. There was a lot to follow because an awful lot was being said; too much of which was plain narrative (and with few rhymes), i.e. as if in a novel, instead of imagery to make me identify with the emotions on display.

I liked the positive guitar and drums, and how the drums kept to sidestick to break out later on the snare, but when they do that the drummer is on his own, (if you imagine that in a 'live band' context it would look a bit odd). I'd have pushed the organ up in the mix at that point, and back down when the drummer goes back to sidestick, or, only brought the organ in when the snare was in.

I never usually advocate more reverb (!), but I wonder if a song with such a plaintive tale should have some to make things sound ehtereal, certainly on the guitar solos when they come in, which I really enjoyed.

John

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