I agree with all you said, good input, thanks. I was toying with a remix last night, and thinking that i should have the whole mix "lighten up" a bit in the verses, and maybe the organ come up to support the drums on chorus. I was also thinking that maybe dropping the finger picked guitar, and going with some noodled guitar in the chorus that is not in the verse. I think it needs to build more.

While i like the lyrics, i also agree that they never fully go to hook line status in the chorus. I am semi happy with the song, but i think your suggestions will help.


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