Hi Marty,

What a song! It's really good and very easy to listen to. You always handle the AABA form so wonderfully well and this one was no exception.

What really appealed to me was the the skill with which the lyrics were crafted. I loved the way that you linked lines 1 and 3 in each A-section with the consonance "s" sound in each line's final word and then used perfect rhyme in lines 2 and 4. It worked for me! To my ears, this really helped capture the self-reflective feel of the song. One thought that occurred as I listened was to wonder how "fallen star" rather than "falling star" would sound in the lyrics.

I don't normally comment on lyrics because they are often very personal. I hope you don't mind my thoughts. As I have already indicated, these are incredibly well crafted and well developed lyrics in my opinion. They're a great match for the music.

All the best,
Noel

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