hi Noel,
Reminds me of the type of Mc Cartney written Beatles song that would have been given to Ringo to sing.
Adore the chord sequence in the “if you were a season…” section.
Not sure I would do much if anything at all with this version – maybe shorten the various ending sections. I think it could end quite happily at around 2:45.
Other than that, I would echo John's comments above.
Marc