Wow. This song has so much promise but you really need to spend more time on the lyric structure. Sadly, it's all over the place - and I say this with the utmost respect because I feel you have a good song here.!

You have no rhyme scheme here which stops the song from flowing as it should. I know there are those who feel that a writer should not be tied to rhyming schemes as it limits them somewhat. But i'm completely in the other camp on this one - and so are the vast majority of the greatest writers of the last century.

With a little effort this could be so easily fixed. an ABCB rhyme scheme would seem to work:


Christmas Eve by a fireplace
Watching softly falling SNOW : This should be the rhyme line in each verse.
In this yuletide memory with my love tonight
Wassail’s brewing on the stove:: use the "meet me by the mistletoe" line here to rhyme with SNOW

Christmas carols on the radio
Twinkling lights on the tree:: Change this line to rhyme with mistletoe.
In this yuletide memory be my love tonight
Meet me by the mistletoe

Christmas time can be romantic
There’s a magic in the AIR:: Again, this would be your easiest rhyme line
All alone just the two of us
Let’s make a memory ...."That only we can SHARE" just a thought lol.
A Christmas memory

We don’t have to go out anywhere
You can stay right here with me:: change this line to rhyme with "mistletoe"
In this yuletide memory be my love tonight
Meet me by the mistletoe

Solo

Christmas time can be romantic
There’s a magic in the air
All alone just the two of us
Let’s make a memory
A Christmas memory

Don’t need presents, don’t need anything
All I want is here with me :: again, change to rhyme with mistletoe.
You will be my everything be my love tonight
Meet me by the mistletoe
Make a Christmas memory
Be my love tonight
Meet me by the mistletoe

There are plenty of rhymes to choose from: Blow, Glow, Aglow, To and Fro, Show, Snow.

This is said constructively and with respect and of course you are free to ignore me entirely.

Good luck with the song.

Music is what feelings sound like.