Hey Kevin – thanks for taking the time to respond. You actually brought
a couple of things to the foreground which I had overlooked.

The intro is too long . . . and I am an admirer of Ralph Murphy and his yearly #1s appraisals. Initially my tune was put together thinking of a band on stage. Trying to get the audience into it with a souped-up lead.!

But I cut the intro back already and probably could have done more so.

As for the resonator and lead work, I want them augmenting each other
between the lyric lines – maybe trading off – but this does need tightening.

“All men are broken” is the hook – in the eyes of a women, all men will never be the way they want them to be – i.e. broken. Some being more broken than others.

Having reviewed the lyrics since your comments, I agree with the "yanking the chain" line comment - really does jump out
- I can do better and/or eliminate altogether. The last line of first verse needs help – could be clearer.

As for pitching through Taxi, as a member, I respond to industry listings
which they mail to me as a member. If I submit to them I had better make sure
that my song sounds like or a la the style for which they are searching. Or I won't
get forwarded in spite of glowing reviews! Your submission has to be bang on target

Sure it’s tough and it’s an inside game at Nashville. But the songs are going nowhere
sitting on my computer. I wouldn’t skip a yes/no pitch as it is an opportunity.
I do think Taxi’s feedback is great and worth the submission price.

Glad you liked the song, and good luck with your own writing.

Ian

Ian
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