JCJazz,

I guess I'm one of the lousy songwriters from the mutual admiration society. I haven't posted before now because I somehow overlooked your post. I have been playing catch-up after being out sick, and hospitalized for most of December.

I actually like the quality of your voice for this style. With proper mic and mixing, I think your voice would sound right. As far as the pitch goes, there are places where you are pretty close, and then others where you are not so close. However, a lot of very successful singers have made a lot of money, singing only "close" to pitch. So, as has already been stated, I would work on getting at least closer to pitch. I don't think pitch correction software would do the trick.

As to the song, one thing I would recommend is to maybe break it up a little. It seems to just all run together. If there were a lead or something earlier in the song, it would probably hold interest a little better. But overall I think it's a good effort, especially for a work in early progress.

Keep posting! Look forward to hearing more from you.

Steve


Steve Young
Music
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