Hi SD,

Wow!!! This is a very well written song. It sounds like it would be right at home in a stage musical. Very very nice. I loved the feminine rhymes in the bridge (guide you / beside you / inside you). I also loved the melody on the major 7ths.

When I read what John Ford had written, it got me thinking and, for what it's worth, I'll pass those thoughts on. I think the section that John refers to could be made more easily singable if a few words were removed. Something like the below.

    Listen closely, you'll realize
    there's so much not seen by eyes
    but hearts can recognize the sounds of love


In the above, it would possible to heighten lyric tension by having a slight pause after "hearts" if "eyes" flowed straight on to "but" without a pause. Using a pause in this way is one of the devices of rhetoric and it can be very effective when it works in lyrics.

Please keep in mind that these thoughts are just my opinions. Feel free to throw in the trash can

All the best,
Noel


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