Thanks to all for the feedback on my first cut. I tweaked the lyrics a bit, now he's "dying" to hear the girl's words instead of "hoping." I redid the vocal with a little more confidence in what the melody actually is, and I trimmed one of the refrains at the end so now it's even shorter (2:40). Maybe I should extend the fade with some more soloing - NEXT version.

But I did re-mix it to put the drums much more out-front, and it does rock more now. Very good suggestion - thanks Floyd! Speaking of rocking more, has anyone heard the Stones' new single "Gloom and Doom"? It's classic Stones! Best in many years I think. Mick, Keith, & company are no spring chickens but they can still bring it when there's a new greatest hits collection to spice up.

I replaced the file on SoundCloud so the link is the same as the original post.

Thanks again,
Bruce


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