Very intriguing lyrics.

In headphones, the vocals are too far back in the mix for me to clearly hear. It might be different through speakers. You've picked some really lovely sounds from BIAB, but (to my ears) they compete with the vocals.

Nice arrangement! The second time listening, I could hear the harmony more clearly. You've mentioned that this was a difficult song for you to set, and I think you've done a really nice job. The melody comes across as a sort of Native American chant, which really suits the material.

It would have been nice to hear even more harmony on the chorus.

Good stuff.

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?