Hi pariahdise, This song has a ton of potential! I liked the chord progression and your singing was very good!

But there are a couple of things that I would change. One, as Robert has said, is the timing. That is very distracting IMHO. The other thing that bothered me was the high register of the organ in a couple of spots. It just comes out of nowhere and screams at me. Maybe an octave or two lower might be better. But that may be just me and others may or may not agree.

Like I said this has a ton of potential. You have a great song in the making here. Changing the organ is optional but changing that timing problem is mandatory IMHO. You are very close to having a super song here so don’t stop working on it!

Doc-take it easy John this is just a sharp scalpel. It will not cut deep so don't worry.
Me-I'm not John
Doc-I know, I am!

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