I agree with both Josie and Noel.

This song has a ton of potential IMHO. A change or two in the backing tracks would help but what ever you do do not change the lyrics. They are fantastic.

If I could make one suggestion it would be this. On your vocals there are times when you take a word, through and do come to mind, and sing it with two notes, mostly an F down to a C. Personally I think that detracts from the song. Keeping the note on an F like you did in other places sounds much better to me. Of course that is just my opinion and others may disagree.

Keep working on this and good luck.


OK, a random thought;
Why does toilet paper need a commercial? Who's not buying it?

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