I had a hard time figuring out where I was in the song. It needs some sort of melody to keep you on track.

In a song, it should be easy to know by listening where you are in the song. The verse and chorus sounded similar enough that I was wondering verse? or chorus?

maybe it's just me, but that;s my take


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