I love the melody, like Floyd said re: speed writing, with a tiny few changes with the lyric the phrasing would be easier to accomplish, i.e. in a couple of places a few too many words. But even with that said you sold the song.

Again you have some very good writing mixed into this speedy project. In particular the bridge:

Is there a way, to be near to another,
Without losing your head or your heart?
Can I go on, and keep it together,
Or must I keep falling apart?

The bridge lyric sings itself!

Later,