I had intended on commenting last week, but got distracted by other things.

I like the "provocative" title, the catchy chorus and the arrangement. Nicely done. I also liked how none of the lines in the opening lyric rhymed.

Sorry for harping on this again, but there are a lot of spots where the vocals seem to be coming in late. I know that there's a ton of stuff to learn with DAWS, but learning how to nudge vocals around will come in real handy. It's great for fixing little timing issues where you really don't feel like singing the vocal over again.

I also think it would do better without the fade at the end. Fades at the end of a song are usually placed there because you want to give the impression that the song continues after the fade. So the fade doesn't really buy you anything here.

Good work!

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?