Thank you for your reply Don Gaynor aka songwriting student of Professor Pat Pattison ;-)

Song 1 is about a guy stuck in a bad relationship that he just can't let go of. Unfortunately "that'll" will sound too strange in that line. Is "taking me away" wrong? I think it sounds the best of the lines I've tried. If not, maybe "to take me away" would be better?

Song 2 is about a girl who feels lonely, but no one knows or understands. This song isn't quite as finished yet, but it implies that something bad happened to her, possibly suicide. Here you think it's alright that "thought" isn't followed by "to..." or "about..."?

I understand that the more info I give, the easier it gets for you, but I'd prefer not to post entire lyrics, when I most likely won't record any of these songs for months. Also, how I sing, the speed and the melody will impact the songs.


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