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The first verse works for me and the second doesn't.

Who is 'we?'
what is "the thing?"

If you make these questions clear later on, good. If you leave them as they are, you have lost me.


Flatfoot sez: Call me when 'Talent-in-a-Box' is ready to ship! -- [8{>

Got some tunes on You Tube:
http://www.youtube.com/user/flatfoot50
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My BiaB lesson site:
http://jdwolfe0.wixsite.com/learnbiab