I’m really grateful to all of you for these comments.

Kevin – can’t accuse you of not speaking your mind !!

What I might to is build up an alternative instrumental only version of this. Scrap the lyric, in your terms !

The thing is on my CD (8 tracks already completed now) I wanted a bit of everything…a rock-tinged one, a reggae-tinged one etc. So this is the bluesy one.

Rys (and others). You’re quite right. Vocally I’m not comfortable at all with the song yet. The take here is probably only the 3rd or 4th time I’ve sung it. I guess I should have waited before posting.

Thanks for that Gene. The meter pattern is deliberate. I don’t think I’ve broken my cardinal rule, which is to maintain the stress pattern dictated by meaning, rather than the music. (bowie always does this and it drives me mad - )

Ab – that sounds like good advice. It’s always good to whack the bass up !

Noel, I wanted to keep the echos of those gtr chops audible (having spent the best part of a day configuring them to follow the timing of the triplets). That’s why the rthm gtr track is so loud. And I don’t think you can really hear those shadows anyway. Oh well…

I like these comments because they converge on the same points, which doesn’t always happen..

Stay tuned for take 2 in the near future and (ed who I haven’t mentioned yet ! all the others), thanks again.

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