I did not read "all of the replies above so excuse me if I am a bit repetitious . . . I did read a few responses about forgetting about trying to fit the tune into a particular genre and I am 100% on board there, as while the tune has a "I Put A Spell On You" vibe, the vocal is anything but the blues. But that does not mean I would change anything because it works as it is. Re: "A pal who is a drummer" why not plugging in some real drums?

Bottom-line is IMHO you have come up with a very haunting melody, interesting lyric, and interesting instrument choice combined with a recognizable chord progression. This makes for a solid package.

PS: Marc, other than the absence of maybe "a touch of cowbell " I can't find anything I'd change.

Later,