Loved your lyrics. Creating lyrics has been something I just can't get a bead on. Songs will get better and better and I must say there is some excellent support in this forum.
Scott C
lyrics have always been the hard part for me too. That is why I seek out good lyric writers who are better at it than me. By working with a few writers of lyric I have learned how to write better on my own. I'm no expert by any means. Teaming up with a good wordsmith can really jump start your skills.
Read as many different books on songwriting and lyric crafting. There are many different ways to write and come up with ideas. However, the best way to really get better is to write, write, write, write, and than write some more.
Just like practicing scales on a piano or chords on a guitar, writing lyrics on paper takes repetition and perseverance to improve. Progress is slow but over time you will notice a difference and an improvement in how easy the ideas and words come and the quality of the writing as well.
The more you write, the faster you improve. The folks who write one song a year or maybe two will never see improvement. The person writing on a daily basis, even if it's not a complete song is the one who will in a short time be crafting exceptional lyrics.
Just my thoughts.
side bar comment: I have 2 songs I'm working on currently with the same lyric co-writer. One is my lyrical idea, the other is hers. They are for the song challenge and when I put them up I will identify who's ideas are predominate in which song.
I can often just send her a song title and a basic idea of what I;m thinking the song should be about and she comes back in a day or two with some verses and choruses which we then start to refine. Back and forth, give and take, until we think that's as far as we can take it. Working with a co-writer forces one to think outside of that box in which we all exist. She comes up with things that would never occur to me and vice versa... in the end, the song is better than either of us could have written alone.
Example: Come & Go (Rose) on my music site.... we worked on that song back and forth for several weeks on the initial writing and then also over several months with a screener at the Nashville Song writers Association to slice and dice with professional advice in the mix as well.....meanwhile, we were writing other things.... always keep writing....