It wasn´t ment as negative as you might have read it. It was, like I mentioned in my post, a nitpicking thing, but a positive ment constructive critique. I understand perfectly what you say. You want to tell the story the way you ment it when you wrote it. But sometimes it doesn´t get there the way you thought it would. In this case (just mho) the first line didn't come through: I could not get it 'till the third time I listened.
Nothing negative: just trying to help....

As for using the word vocalist: If it makes things better: I call myself a zanger (Dutch for singer )

You can find my music on my website if you want.

Mike
www.mikewever.nl