Nice stuff. New Age sounding tunes are cool. It was a pleasant listen although a bit long at 5+ minutes. With the slower tempo tunes like this, one has to be careful not to get too long and repetitive or boring.

I especially like the synth that comes in around 25 sec or so.... a few wrong notes need fixing, and the minor chord at 54 sec needs something to lead into it.... so abrupt, that it sounds "just plain wrong" IMHO.

I listened several times. I think you have the makings of 3 different but equally cool new age songs in that one song idea. You just need to split them up and work them up. Just watch the chord changes and make the transitions smooth from one chord to the next, especially the ones people are not expecting to hear.

Nice musical ideas, now, refine them into something very very cool.

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