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Too much information. To keep viewers attention you must show people's faces. I am not making this up.

Edit in some stock footage of smiling-face reaction shots. Even just a few stills would be a huge improvement.

Lots of good sources for stock footage - here is one:

http://footage.shutterstock.com/category/People-13/

Last edited by flatfoot; 03/07/14 10:42 PM.

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