Greg, You are certainly one of the best poetry driven lyricists on this forum. You have without a doubt one of the finest voices also. Both these elements along with a strong melody shine through on this one. I have two very small nits and I hesitate to post them because I don't want to detract from such a great song. But they stood out to me and I'll take my chances alienating anyone. The vocal could use some breath control. I realize the intimacy and the breathiness of the soft delivery and you don't want to lose any of that, so it might be tricky,but the intake breaths seem extremely loud and detract from the otherwise perfect take. Also there is one place where you have a pause with a single guitar strum. It doesn't sound smooth. I have had the same problem with stops and I think I remember floyd playing one live single strum in place of the real track strum that transitioned quite nicely. Again, I absolutely love the song, especially the lyrics and the vocal. Best, Tom