Nice clean mix.

I recall this song. The only nit I have is the extreme panning on the sax and keys. In cans it's really evident. Speakers, probably not so much. I'd just ease them a bit more to the center so that they are audible in both sides a bit more. You can still have them panned off center to give that stereo image.

Aside from the panning..... I like this version a lot.

OK.... just got to the ending. this ending needs some clean up. I'd likely just let the instruments repeat the chords without the vox " till it's time to go home" ....make it a short tag and if the sax is to handle the outtro solo.... that's cool and totally legit for the style of the song, but make it short as well.. a measure or two is the perfect amount. Beyond that, people are saying..... when is this going to end?..... keep the drums going until the sax outtro.... and.... if the sax has been panned up to that point,,,, as it comes into the tag move it fully center.

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