Josie,
I loved everything about this one but the length, but keep in mind I have a thing about songs going over 3.5 minutes lol.
With this said if I were performing it, I would cut back on the "Who Wants to Know Him" phrases. But this is not my song, (I wish it was lol) and I am not performing it, so my suggestion of course is personal to probably my taste only.
I wish you would play it tomorrow on SJ, my bet is it will be well received.
See you tomorrow.
Later,